Question

Can you give me constructive advice look at the elements needed for a good paragraph: topic sentence, examples, unity, coherence, point of view, and a clincher. Respond to these elements in these paragraphs, please

.My man cave is one of my favorite places to be. It has a lot of space and it is peaceful. I have a PlayStation and Nintendo Switch on the black entertainment system. The couches are soft and relaxing. Whenever a person walks in, the level of comfort they express from the stress free candle that sits in wall is always never cease to amaze me. When I come home from work, it is the first place I stop by unless my wife is at home. It is a paradise that I recommend for any person or pet.

Answer 1

A topic sentence must always convey easily what the paragraph is about. when a topic sentence is made, the writer should be able to help the readers understand the topic that they are talking about which we say as the main topic and also should be able to explain about the inner meaning or what actually the paragraph is talking about. For example, if we are going to talk about prosocial behaviour in our paragraph, that is, the topic is prosocial behaviour, then there should be topic sentence. Here we can use the topic sentence as ' the advantages of prosocial behaviour'. In this we can explain what a prosocial behaviour or helping behaviour and also the advantages that an individual gets by helping others and why they are helping.

Both unity and coherence in a written paragraph is important. Unity in a paragraph is very much important as the things written in a paragraph must have a connection in between them. The things written in a paragraph should not be something that we simply write. more than the length and the content of the paragraph, the most important is the unity or the connection between the sentences in the paragraph. The paragraph should focus on the same idea. All the sentences should convey the meaning of the real topic. When the lose of touch of the sentences in a paragraph or the connection between the sentences in a paragraph is lost, there the coherence and the unity of the paragraph is also lost.

Focusing on the point of view is an important thing in a paragraph. Each sentence in a paragraph should focus on the real point of view that the writer tries to speak out. And also a clincher is having a great importance in writing a paragraph. The clincher is a concluding in which we can conclude all the ideas together and reach the main point. And the reader should be amazed with the clincher in a paragraph. And it explains how much successful the paragraph is.

In the given paragraph, it is explained about the writers man cave which he loves a lot. But the paragraph is lacking almost everything that is important in a paragraph. The writer explains about his man cave, but the reader may not get the idea why the writer says about the mancave and what actually is the importance of the man cave is. The unity of the sentences are seen in the paragraph but the coherence which is the connection between the sentences are not seen. And could also add a better clincher to the paragraph.